Creative writing for Extension English: Collaborative Novella

I have the pleasure of teaching the HSC English Extension class this year. It is so much fun teaching this class because I get to work with six wonderful young people who are always eager to discuss literature. That might night sound like you’re idea of fun, but it gets me thinking hard and giggling every Tuesday morning. I always look forward to the class even though I’m usually a bit tired from having stayed up late preparing for our discussions!

Another cool thing about Extension English is that it is a split divide with critical and creative. Students in this course are assessed 50% critical thinking about the literature & ways of thinking set for study and then 50% creative writing using the conventions of the literature and reflecting the ways of thinking set for study. I love that divide.

Right now my students are working towards developing their creative writing skills so as that they can reflect the Romantic style and ways of thinking through narrative form and language. For their next assessment they will be assessed on these skills. The blank page is a cruel, cruel thing for most young writers and I know that this is the case for my current students. They love to write once they get going, but starting really is ‘like a bout of some painful illness’. As a sort of poulitce to their pain I have designed an assessment task that means the writing will be collaborative – if we write together we can share the burden! The task is to write a collaborative novella – each student is responsible for up to 2000 words in the form of two ‘chapters’. I will be one of the writers on the project – and this means I can support them in the planning stage as well as modelling best practice when it comes to drafting, editing and rewriting. I’m so excited that I get to write. Oh, and the best part is that we will be entering the novella into a competition using a pseudonym. They are SO excited about that.

Here is the assessment outline given to the students. It essentially functions as a project (PBL) with a driving question, investigation, product and presentation. If you look closely you will see that I have incorporated formative and summative assessment – as well as speaking elements so students must present/defend their work.

Yesterday we spent the double period in our ‘waterhole’ learning space. We had the tables arranged in a ‘boardroom meeting’ configuration and we spent two hours planning characters, plot, setting and considering what paradigms would be evidenced/explored in each scene. It was delightful to see their ideas come whooshing forth – young people are so wonderfully, crazily creative when given the confidence to take risks and share.

I have been cast as The Philosopher – a madman and a drunkard who talks to a horse named Doyle. I have one week to write the first draft of my two chapters. Excited!!

Build your vocabulary and improve your arguments

Below is a list of words and ideas from marking that may help students improve their writing :0)

NOTE: Even though I don’t necessarily agree with teaching writing in a piecemeal fashion, I do feel that helping students to improve their vocabulary and expression is essential … why? No, not for their exams (although that is going to help them for sure) but simply because being able to articulate your thoughts into a coherent argument is a life skill absolutely essential for young people heading into the fray with ultra conservatives hell-bent on killing the planet, or at least the human race. (Oh, and yeah – I know there’s wanky literary-type stuff in there that probably ain’t saving any tree or fish anytime soon. Bite me.)

laments
absolve
catharsis
precipitates
moral order
divine retribution
righteous
repercussions
demonstrative
ambition/inhibition
sensibility
preoccupation with …
new world thinker
a complete cessation of existence
immanence of death
manifests in …
ratifies
moral integrity
mediatation on …
inner argument
crystalises
religious reform
insinuating
antithetical
‘the apparel oft proclaims the man’ – Hamlet (re: Dickinson’s attire, all white)
pejorative
betrays
‘Don’t you think, my lord, that Beauty accounts for more than Truth?’ (Ophelia to Hamlet)
alerting audiences to …
cultural uncertainty
traditiinal set of values
conflict with society’s expectations
disillusioned with society
shared connection with ‘universal’ (significant) concepts and experiences
importance of family in framing an individual’s well-being and idenitity
enveloped
self-castigation
internal debates of the mind
religious tension and political turmoil
echoes the cultural anixeties of the time
rational thinking and self-exploration
…. speaks of …
embodiment of the sturggle between old and new values/ideals
imbued with
intrinisc moral code
a modern individual constrained by the views and expectations of a traditional society
eloquent
archetypal metanarrative of humanity
intellectual obstacles
propounds
propogated
superlative adjective
moral imperatives
linguistic hinge
postulates
torrid
reiterated
tragic consequences of freewill
selects reason over passion
places trust in the divine being
contemplative tone
tragic decision from which she cannot return
intimate poems
the audience is positioned to …
humanistic issues: love, revenge, rivalry, loyalty, politics, society
diction
deals with basic human emotions
flourishing
importance of morality in guiding one’s life
Aristotelian values
resolution
philosophical and moral questioning
antithesis
equivocation
analogous
ideological
clash between traditional Christianity and rising humanism
resonates
accentuates
eloquent and articulate language
inner turmoil
commentator on the social, religious and philosophical inconsistencies of the era
philosophical deliberation
own moral guidelines
moral ambiguity
musings
transcends time
monosyllabic
sympathy for
empathy for
aligned
inversion of speech
balanced sentencing
moral superiority
human desire for forgiveness

elucidates

initiates

Year 12 Advanced Module B: Pecha Kucha Assessment Task – helpers

(Below is a scaffold for my students for our HSC Module B: Critical Study of Text speaking assessment task. It could help teachers/students doing close or critical study of any text, really. More about this task – including the handout – can be found here and here.)

POSSIBLE STRUCTURE FOR YOUR SPEECH (FOR THOSE WHO ARE STRUGGLING)

INTRODUCTION: directly address the key words/ideas in the essay question. Identify which essays you will be speaking about in the speech (all or a couple). Outline your thesis – this will just be what you think Orwell attempts to do with his essays (so to make it easy, just select on or two key ideas). Remember that what we want to see is that you have developed a personal, critical response to the essays … this is your ‘thesis’.

WHAT WAS YOUR INITIAL RESPONSE TO THE ESSAYS? be specific and honest – did you like the essays? did you like Orwell’s style? His content? WHY DID YOU HAVE THIS RESPONSE? give a couple of examples from the essays to support this. THEN TELL US THAT THIS HAS EVOLVED … WHAT DO YOU THINK NOW? (this is your thesis)

(there are two ways to go about this, one where you focus
on a couple of essays, one where you focus on all the essays – for those doing TWO essays, you might want to treat each essay separately like I have with Yeats and threading the following points together as you discuss each essay.)

WHAT DID YOU LEARN ABOUT HIS CONTEXT? only talk about that which is relevant to your thesis!! Consider where he published these essays – who was his audience? WHY DID THIS HELP YOU TO UNDERSTAND HIS IDEAS/PURPOSE BETTER? make sure you link this to the essays … give evidence from the essay.

WHAT DID YOU LEARN ABOUT THE ESSAY FORM? You might want to show off a little and say something about Michel de Monaigne and the French definition of the word ‘essai’ … tell us something briefly about the essay form – is it what you are familiar with? Why do people write essays? HOW DOES ORWELL USE THE STRUCTURE AND FEATURES OF THE ESSAY FORM TO EXPRESS HIS IDEAS? Think about why he chose to write essays and not ‘articles’ per se … why didn’t he just write poems, or plays, or novels? This must link directly to the essays you are discussing.

WHAT DID YOU LEARN FROM READING CRITICAL RESPONSES TO THE ESSAYS OF ORWELL (OR JUST ABOUT ORWELL AS A WRITER)? You should refer to one or two critics – you really need to get to HOW this response altered your original thoughts on Orwell as a writer and thinker (as an ‘artist’) … did it make you change your way of thinking, did it challenge you to defend your original position, did it reinforce what you were already thinking about Orwell? Give examples from the critics (just a half a sentence or a sentence quote – we want YOUR ideas about Orwell, not the critic’s) and also examples from the essays to support your evolving appreciation of them.

NOW WHAT DO YOU THINK OF ORWELL AS A WRITER/THINKER/ARTIST? This is a return to the subjective frame and acknowledging the evolution of your response to his essays – might be a good idea to refer to his essays as being ‘significant’ and ‘valuable’.
REMEMBER … AT ALL OF THESE POINTS YOU NEED TO BE RETURNING IMPLICITLY TO THE ESSAY QUESTION … FOCUSING ON THAT IDEA THAT THE ESSAYS ARE SIGNIFICANT AND VALUABLE … THEREFORE THEY ENDURE. REMEMBER WHAT WE DISCUSSED IN CLASS YESTERDAY ABOUT ORWELL TAPPING INTO THE THREE KEY COMPONENTS OF THE ARTIST: THE AESTHETIC, RHETORICAL AND ETHICAL.

NOTE: Please don’t forget that this is a SPEECH! Use your rhetorical devices – repetition, rhetorical questions, dramatic pause, strong statement, anecdotes, humour, accumulation.
Good luck! Send me your speeches for proof-reading/editing no later than 48 hours BEFORE you have chosen to present.

Hammering my thoughts into a unity

Over the last few weeks I have been lamenting the HSC and summative assessment. It is causing far too much unnecessary stress and angst for both teachers and students. Reading an article about assessment in the senior years in QLD (‘Formative Assessment in Year 12: A conceptual Framework, Jo Dargusch, AATE journal Volume 45, #3 – no I don’t know how to reference properly and one day I will learn, lol) I found myself simultaneously nodding and shaking my head – no easy feat and I’m sure I looked silly sitting on the beach doing that! What caused this response? Acknowledgment and dismay. The teachers interviewed feel pressured to teach to the task (in QLD there is no external examination as such, but assessments by students are ‘judged’ by a panel of external ‘experts’) by a variety of players in their contexts. Feedback is driven by students attaining results in the task, not by learning outcomes. But I’ll got into that in another post – this one is a celebration of determination and faith in scampering visions.

In conversation with my Head Teacher, we have decided to re-vamp our speaking task for our Year 12 students. It was too dry and analytical – not allowing for student voice – haha – or for defending their argument. I am teaching George Orwell’s essays and have already written a unit that uses the conceptual framework drawn from the Stage 6 Visual Arts syllabus. I am also very keen to have this unit of work student-centred since the crux of the module is the students’ own personal response to the text – the module is designed to help foster independent, critical thinking. Doesn’t make sense for it to be teacher-centred then, huh? During term four last year (our first term of Year 12 work – I know confusing!) my class had become accustomed to a routine of learning based on the archetypal learning spaces. We had four periods per week – the first was teacher-centred ‘campfire’ instruction, the second was independent ‘cave’ work, the third was collaborative group work in the ‘wateringhole’ and the fourth was student-centred ‘campfire’ discussions. It was hard for them initially, but then they got quite familiar with it. I don’t know what happened this year – I just got caught up in the content and thus 90% of the lessons were teacher-centred. Not repeating that mistake again. So I shall return to our archetypal learning spaces structure. I’m also throwing in there key elements of Project Based Learning as well – main products and investigations, a learning journal and a driving question. Just for a little bit of spice!

Another aspect central to this unit of work will be the assessment itself – a task modified from an idea by my good friend David Chapman. Instead of the usual speech responding to an ‘essay-like’ question, our students will be engaging with a more challenging generic question that engages with the heart and soul of the module and forces students to reflect on their learning as a process. Here’s the question:

Is it the craftsmanship, the ideas or both that produces literature that has the power to endure over time and place?

This question was the subject of much twitter discussion with my friends Kelli and David. It was great to discuss key words and phrases from our Stage 6 syllabus that have been misinterpreted or misunderstood by teachers and thus students. The discussion reinforced my belief that a syllabus must be a working document – it must be accessible for the teachers who use it daily. Don’t get me wrong, I love our syllabus – but when it gets reduced to a series of single terms that students regurgitate without understanding, well of course that’s problematic. It was nice to finally come to the conclusion that our question actually gets to the guts of textual integrity without giving the students the term as a separate entity to add to their essays.

So what do they do with this question? They need to create a Pecha Kucha (ours will be 15×15) to visually support their presentation and act as a prompt for their discussion. We want them to focus on their prescribed text to answer the question and central to their talk will be a discussion of how they developed their own personal response to the text in light of the perspective of others, an understanding of context and an evaluation of the text’s structure, language etc.

We’re going to test that our students really do know their stuff, and force them to engage in critical and creative thinking, by asking them three impromptu questions after their talk. Students also have to submit a learning journal in which they have documented their developing appreciation of the prescribed text. This is very much like the Drama and Dance model of HSC assessment. We want our students to appreciate that learning is a process not a product.

There’s other cool stuff we’ve incorporated into the unit, like creative writing, Socratic circles and debates, to get our kids moving, thinking, doing.

I’m pretty excited about this new assessment – the actual task itself probably doesn’t seem that exciting to some, but what I find really cool is that I am beginning to understand how the multiple strands of my new approaches to teaching can come together in this task, and in future tasks. It might all go to the dogs in the end, but right now I am rejoicing that this task has helped me to ‘hammer my thoughts into a unity’ (Yeats).

Are teachers content management systems?

On Friday I tweeted this:

It has since been retweeted by a couple of my PLN. So why did I tweet it and why might it resonate with other tweachers?

When the thought came to me I was hastily preparing for the first meeting of my school’s new PBL Research Team (more on this to come) and in doing so I was looking at the data from a DER in Stage 6 survey I collected last year. The survey was completed twice – once by teachers and once by Year 10 students. Essentially I asked both teachers and students what their expectations were for DER in Stage 6. (For my international readers, DER is the 1-1 initiative of our current federal government that aims to give a laptop to every student in Years 9-10, and Stage 6 refers to the highest level of secondary schooling in NSW – culminating in the external Higher School Certificate examinations.)

Here are some of the questions I included in the survey:

Responses from both surveys were very similar – students and teachers did not expect to use the netbooks often in class. The only technology that both groups wished to see being used was IWBs – and this would be as little as once a fortnight. If netbooks were used they would be used for accessing information on the internet. The responses weren’t unexpected – these students have been conditioned by a lifetime of school-setting education exposure to see education as ‘the filling of a pail’ – they are the empty vessels waiting to be filled by teacher. And teachers have been conditioned to see themselves in the same way. Stage 6 means big pressure for teachers and students – no one wants to fail, therefore no one wants to risk being set on fire. My analogy for teachers is the content management system – but the irony of course is that we are not robots, we have not been programmed to work in the seamless, repetitive and reliable way that a CMS can. So the acceptance of teachers as CMS actually necessitates failure.

Here is a definition of a CMS I found which relates nicely to how teachers are viewed by governments, parents and media and therefore shapes how teachers see themselves:

‘A CMS or Content Management System is used for the control and editing of content. Content includes electronic files, images and video based media, audio files, electronic documents and web text.’ (Source: http://www.kangainternet.com.au/content-management-system.html)

I like this definition because it engages with digital media – something many teachers are beginning to do more regularly since the introduction of DER. But the ‘control and editing’ of this digital content still stays firmly in the hands of the teacher.

I came across another type of CMS – the ‘Learning Content Management System’ when I was googling CMS (Yes, I had a normal person look and went to wikipedia)

‘LCMS is software for managing learning content across an organization’s various training development areas. It provides developers, authors, instructional designers, and subject matter experts the means to create and re-use e-learning content …’ (Source: http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Learning_management_system)

The same essence is repeated even though this is specifically for ‘learning’ – the underlying assumption is that there is ‘content’ that must be ‘delivered’ to students after having been ‘created’ by ‘developers, authors, instructional designers, and subject matter experts’. Replace ‘delivered’ with ‘taught’ and ‘developers’ with ‘teacher’ and you get something like the Victorian ideal which is ‘teachers teach content’ … lol.

There is hope for teachers though! I discovered that you can buy a digital teacher online – see:

‘Ecampus LMS is a learning management system that gives organisations the tools and support they need to create and manage elearning content, manage student data and asses students.’ (Source: http://www.ecampus.com.au/solutions/learning-management-systems/ecampus-platform.html)

OK – I’m being silly, but the three things that the LMS does, according to the blurb, is what teachers are given responsibility for: create and manage content, manage student data and assess students. There just isn’t room for lighting fires – so don’t bother, OK? I mean – education is important, right? *insert sarcastic tone*.

Where am I going with this? Well, I too am a teacher and I too feel the awful mounting pressures of the need to fill students with content necessary to excel in the end of year examination. My Stage 6 class badly want the content – I can see it in their eyes, ‘Please Miss, please just write on the board what we need to know and let us put it in our essays!’ And I know what needs to go in there. But so far I have been resistant to ‘give’ it to them that easily – I have refused to ‘reduce’ the world of literature and ideas  (which in my current case is the man himself, Mr W. Shakespeare) to an essay scaffold and dot points. Does that make me a bad teacher? Well it makes me feel like one. So my solution is to write a blog for them where I put up (in my own words) what they need to know to ace the test. And then I rethink this decision – because isn’t doing that just moving me one step closer to being a CMS/LCMS/LMS?

I know I’m going to do it anyway. I know I should get them to make the blog and write the posts. BUT I also know that they have pressures from other subjects and tell me repeatedly there is no time to do extra work like writing blog posts and making prezis. So, I’ll do it for them. I will. And one day the work I’m initiating with PBL in the more junior years will pay off because these future (and ideal) students will laugh at my vain attempts to maintain power by controlling the information. They will tell me I am a broken-down filing cabinet that needs to move into the 21st century.

And I will laugh with them as we all dance in the fire.

Float on …

It is 6.55 am and I am still sitting in my PJs trying to get my mind and body ready for the craziness that is teaching for another year. My tea is brewing, my clothes drying and my family quietly sleeping in their beds. The sun is beginning its slow daily climb above the ocean out my window. My limbs ache having only had four hours to recuperate from yesterday’s Big Day Out. At 31, I’m starting to feel the ill-effects of long days of standing in the sun, dancing to bands amidst a crowd of strangers.

I am dreading today. Well, maybe not today. Maybe Monday when the students resume. Today is just the teachers and a little time to panic quietly and alone in my classroom.

I’ve worked hard for the last two weeks of the school holidays – planning wonderfully rich education experiences for my students in all classes – except for one. Year 12 Advanced English. Why? Because I’m fearful. I fear the big 6 – and I’m not too proud to admit it. The pressure I feel to help my students achieve the ideal – the elusive Band 6 – has tensed my shoulders more than jumping around for an hour an a half whilst progressive rockers TOOL systematically dismantle my perception of reality.

I’ve been moaning with my head in my hands. Crying on the inside at my own lack of knowledge – my inability to teach well, to think critically or to teach thinking critically and independently. My failure to create/mould/shape great writers. It’s been making my heart beat too fast and it’s been upsetting my husband and my kids. This huge summative, state-wide assessment has made me depressed – and I haven’t even stepped foot in the classroom this year!

So I asked some of my ex-students if there was anything I did when I taught them that they liked – no compliment fishing either, just raw honesty I’d expect from these kids. So here’s a couple of words they said that helped me ‘about face my way of thinking’ (Fugazi lyric for those of you playing spot the music geek):

‘you made us think outside the box and come up with original and insightful ways of looking at texts, you challenged us’

‘You have such a gentle approach to your teaching and you are really switched on when you are teaching.’

‘You inspired with your own thoughts and assisted us in reading a text differently and building our skills at actually reading a text. So while you did so much for us in some parts, we were able to take it a step further.’

These comments have meant the world to me. It’s what I thought I couldn’t do – that I needed to take a course in how to do this. But I guess I did it just by liking my subject, my students … They’ve made me relax (and yes, I’m still tense and anxious a bit but hey, that’s my personality – can’t do much about that!) and I’ve decided just to get into the texts I’m teaching – get excited. Get out there!

One student gave me great advice: Get them to talk to each other.

So I’m going to … passion drives a quality lesson. From me, or from them, or from the text – or all three. So that’s my goal for 2011 – enjoy it, relax, float on … especially for my most mature kids. They need me to be there as a whole person. To be strong and model learning for life, not just a test.

PS: I am now going to be late for Day 1. Oh well …

Helping high school students understand the value of a PLN and PLE

At the end of Year 10 in NSW there is a significant gap between the final external examination – the School Certificate – and when the students can actually leave school. Schools come up with a variety of methods to engage the students during these difficult weeks – in Australia the end of a school year is Summer. No student wants to be at school if they feel they don’t ‘need’ to be when the sky is blue and the surf is up.

At our school a program called the ‘Fab Fortnight’ has been developed in which students are treated to a variety of guest speakers talking to them about a range of topics from managing their credit rating to managing their studies in Year 11 and 12. Last year I was asked to present to the students on ‘Effective PowerPoint Use’ – something passionate to me as I have been tortured with many a terrible PowerPoint presentation! This year I was asked to repeat that session and I offered to run a second session on Web 2.0 tools in Stage 6. I was inspired to present on this by my PLN mentor Darcy Moore who had given a similar presentation to his Year 11 students. You can see his blog post here and his prezi from the session here.

I titled my presentation ‘Unleashing the Web 2.o Beast – Making the Most of Web in Years 11 & 12′. Having just created a survey on DER in Stage 6 (Years 11 & 12 – the final schooling years in Australian secondary schools) for teachers at my school  and seeing from initial responses that many teachers had not altered their teaching programs to incorporate technology nor had they planned to use the netbooks in their classes, I felt slightly anxious about presenting on Web 2.0 to Year 10. Despite this I was determined to help them appreciate the role that PLE (Personal Learning Environments) and PLN (Personal Learning Networks) can play in learning. I demonstrated PLN to them through a quick activity where they were forced to create groups based on disparate characteristics – shoe size, height, street address etc and then use this group to answer three questions drawn from Math, Science and English – they had to network in order to get the answers! I also showed them a question I had posed to teachers via edmodo – students could read their immediate replies and appreciate how asking often garners answers!

I moved on to the power of a PLE by showing them some Web 2.0 tools that can help establish their own individual learning environment. I reminded them that these were NOT necessarily tools that they would be asked to use by their teachers, but rather tools that could be used by them independently. I suggested they could show these to their teachers – who would surely be impressed by this tool and by the student’s initiative. These tools were categorised by Darcy into ten useful categories – see my prezi here.

After enduring my prezi and looking at a couple of examples of the tools being used, the students were sent off to the computer rooms to play around with the tools. They had a task – create a Top 5 Web 2.0 Tools for the HSC list and post this to edmodo with links. I wanted them to play – but they also needed a goal as keeping them on task at this time of the year us quite challenging!

Whilst presenting I noted a number of blank-looking faces … I even heard a few students chatting and saw supervising teachers ‘having a talk’ with them about their inappropriate behaviour. At the end of the session, when students were moved off to the computer rooms, I felt pretty flat. They didn’t seem terribly engaged and I felt that they weren’t interested in the tools. I know I kept saying ‘basically’ too much as well ‘this is really cool’. I felt like a complete geek. I even tweeted about my feelings of failure.

Thankfully my self-deprecation was (for once) unnecessary. Returning to my staffroom and logging into edmodo I saw the Fab Fortnight group getting a lot of new posts – the students were actually doing the task! The students HAD been listening – and they understood what I was talking about. You can see their responses to the task here.

I know not all students and their teachers want to see technology in their classes next year – I have the survey data to prove it. But what I do know is that these tools can (and will) help students to keep themselves organised, to help them collaborate, research and remember the content that will help them get through the HSC. This type of student assessment is not ideal, but it’s what we’ve got. I hope the presentation helped them to better understand the role that a PLN and PLE can play in their future success.

Helping students to develop better arguments with Evidence Charts

As a consequence of the standardized testing of students from the age of 8, the current trend in Australian schools is to ‘teach to the test’. This approach to teaching and learning has become so pervasive, that students in Year 7 are being ‘prepped’ for the requirements of the final HSC examination. Fresh-faced 12 year olds arrive to high school to be greeted with rows of tables facing the front of a room; the front houses a whiteboard (electronic and interactive for the ‘lucky’ ones) and a teacher. These students move through 6 years of teacher-centred lessons where content and structure are king and queen. By the time they reach the HSC they are prepared to vomit this content into neatly organised lines.

 

But what happens when they get to university? What happens when they get out into the real world and read a paper and there’s no one there to break down the news report into easily digestible chunks? When there’s no one there but mainstream media to tell them which politician to vote for and why?

 

Failure to effectively teach students to consider multiple perspectives on a text/issue/idea/theory can have disastrous consequences on our future generations. In my last blog post I reflected on my dawning realisation that I had helped my new Year 12 students rely too heavily on ‘my’ perspective of the texts and concepts we study in class. Speaking to other teachers in our school, I have discovered that they too have similar concerns.

 

At the beginning of this term I was introduced to www.evidencechart.com . This web 2.0 tool essentially helps students to develop stronger arguments as they literally chart the evidence for multiple hypotheses and then rate the strength of the evidence in relation to each hypothesis. These interactive charts have been created with university Science students in mind – looks like university teachers are having the same issues regarding arguments and essay writing that we secondary teachers are!

 

I am currently teaching ‘belonging’ and the poetry of Emily Dickinson. Traditionally my way of teaching poetry (and I know this is uninspired but I also know it is the typical approach) is to stand at the front of the class and analyse the poem – focusing on what the poet is attempting to communicate, how she achieves this and how it relates to the concept ‘belonging’. The students write all over the poems, identifying poetic devices and jotting down teacher’s ideas about why they have been used. As a class we discuss the poem and what we think is going on within it. Poetry is notoriously difficult simply because, as a form, it aims to communicate an intensity of ideas and feelings in a bare minimum of words oddly arranged!

 

There are two main problems I have faced with students and poetry. Often poetry is transformed into rather uninspired essays where students appear to have been playing ‘spot the poetic technique’ – rarely is there any genuine evaluation of these ‘hallowed’ techniques and the impact that each may have on the thoughts, emotions and imaginations of the reader. Furthermore, rarely is there ever an emotive attachment to an interpretation contrary to the one I attributed to the poem.

 

Evidence chart forced my students to examine how and why each stanza of a poem did or didn’t support a particular ‘hypothesis’ about the poem and its relationship to the concept ‘belonging’.  Basically students developed TWO separate (and not necessarily conflicting) hypotheses in response to an essay question then judged and analysed the evidence (TWO poems) in the cells of the evidencedchart matrix and used this evidence to select the most well-supported hypothesis to form the argument of their essays. There is also a cool little ‘hidden’ feature – the contrarian view which is effectively the opposite of the dominant view the student is working on. Filling in the cells from the contrarian view forces students to consider how each piece of evidence could be interpreted in another, contrary way. Have a look below at the screen grab from one of my student’s charts and then see how this was translated into a paragraph.

A desire for the unknown aspects in one’s life can often lead to feelings of anxiety. This idea is prominent throughout Dickinson’s poem ‘I was hungry all the years’.  In the line, ‘I was hungry all the years’, the hunger for food is metaphorical for the speaker’s deprival of the social world. It emphasises the speaker’s lack of connections with society. The reality of this social world is an unknown to the speaker. The line, ‘ I trembling, drew the table near’, illustrates feelings of anxiety within the speaker. Trembling is an emotive word that suggests the speaker is in a fragile state. As she approaches a situation in which she is to confront the social world for the first time, she is overwhelmed by feelings of anxiety. These feelings are an inevitable risk one must take when entering something new in life.

This is a student who had previously written an essay full of what we English teachers call ‘waffle’ – writing that barely engages with the essay question, has no logical argument and fails to evaluate the effectiveness of poetic techniques in relation to an overarching ‘thesis’. He was just writing garbage to fill the word limit and submit the task. His experience with evidence chart has pushed him away from meaningless ramblings for a couple of reasons. Firstly he had to spend A LOT more time with the poem itself to effectively complete the chart – far more analysis and evaluation happening than previously. Secondly the design of the chart (as a matrix) allowed him to visualize his argument as well as rank the strength of each piece of evidence in relation to his hypothesis.  Less rambling essays – that’s a win for both of us!

 

Initially my class was very hesitant about using the charts – they couldn’t understand the relationship between a web 2.0 tool that had been created for Science students and their English essays. After a few minor log-in issues and hiccups with the contrarian view not working on some browsers (an issue that the creators of evidence charts have let me know will be/has been fixed thanks to our feedback) the kids found the charts user-friendly. I think the hardest thing for them all was the fact that they had to THINK about each aspect of the poem and how it did or didn’t support their ideas. The contrarian feature was great as it encouraged them to think from someone else’s perspective and to consider how someone might poke holes in their hypothesis!

 

As a teacher the charts are great – yep, more marking I know – but the comments feature built in to each cell means I can give timely feedback on ideas an analysis BEFORE the essay is handed in. It actually helped me identify weaknesses I hadn’t noted before – such as a top student’s resistance to thinking ‘more’ than was needed to write her essay! Reading the essays that the students have produced after charting their hypotheses and evidence revealed a marked improvement in their arguments AND analysis – win number two! What I have also discovered is a need to teach the importance of gathering more information than necessary to write an essay. What students may see as ‘too much’ information actually allows them to be selective with the content that makes it into their essays. We will be spending the next week working on how to ‘distill’ the essential elements of their evidence charts into compelling essays that articulate a convincing thesis which responds to and answers the given essay question. I’m really pleased I’m now devoting much class time to discussing arguments, evidence and essay-writing – it’s going to be a great help when we study Orwell’s essays next year!

 

A final word on the success of evidence charts in my class room. Last year our faculty altered our first Year 12 English assessment task to include a graphic organizer which demonstrates each student’s planning BEFORE they write their essay. Having used evidence charts in class, a number of students have requested that these be included as one of the many types of graphic organizers allowed for the assessment task. When students ask to keep using a tool, you know it’s good. I’ll certainly be taking their suggestion to my Head Teacher!

 

It’s funny that my introduction to web 2.0 tools has been by way of the Digital Education Revolution (a program for students in Years 9 & 10) yet I’ve found myself using these tools with ALL of my other classes. Evidence charts have been working beautifully with my Year 12 students and I encourage others to give them a go – our HT of History is going to give them a go with his ‘personality’ studies. A web 2.0 tool that is helping my students become better thinkers and writers? Cool!

 

PS: If you’re interested you can check out my blog post for Year 12 on what is an argument here and my prezi introduing evidence charts here.

Why can’t these kids argue?!

I have been teaching my current Year 12 English class for four years – this is highly unusual in an Australian secondary school setting. I started teaching them as an English Extension class in Year 8 and have been timetabled onto their class each year since. Why? Because I have been interested in the impact that one teacher can have on a group of students and their approach to literature and learning. OK – and to be honest, I just really like the kids!

Over the years we have spent many lessons discussing how to write a quality essay in English. However, the focus has often been on a highly structured paragraph (we use the S.T.E.W structure) and the essay questions they have been asked to answer have always been quite open and general.  There essays have always got them great marks and at the beginning of this year (Year 11), I felt confident that this group would do extremely well in the HSC.

And then reality hit …

These students have become very, very good at giving me back my ideas in the structure that I requested. But is this thinking critically and creatively? No! After four years of teaching them, I’ve realized that they have missed out on learning the fine art of developing an argument. Their writing lacks passion, authenticity and depth. There is no ‘personal voice’ – a quality that as an HSC marker I know is deeply important to a convincing, compelling essay.

I have been working hard this term to get my students (now Year 12) to move from being ‘passive’ to ‘active’ learners. I have reorganized our lessons so only one in four is teacher-centred whilst the others are centred on independent, paired or whole-group activities. Yet what I knew I needed to address explicitly was their inability to develop a convincing and personal argument in their writing because of their over-reliance on MY ideas. (Aside: My joke is that I spend 2 hours on google preparing for their lessons, so by relying on me as ‘fount of all knowledge’ really they’re just trusting a really watered-down google search, lol!)

I want my students to REALLY have something to say about the texts and concepts that they are studying. (After all, these texts are just mirrors of their world, and a failure to say something authentic about these texts is a failure to say anything authentic about their world.) I want them to consider multiple perspectives (readings) of a novel/play/film/poem and then articulate their PERSONAL interpretation and why this has developed. I DON’T want them to swallow my ideas like they’re gospel. I DO want them to think critically about texts by considering opposing views and the genesis of these views.

So how do I do this with a group of kids who are rather resistant to opposing the ideas of their teacher(s)?

Having, myself, evolved into a complete edu-tech geek over the last two years, of course I looked for a web 2.0 tool to help me! And guess what? I found one!

Hmmm … I just noted how long this post is already without getting to the real guts of my post … so check out my next post devoted to my latest fav web 2.0 tool – evidence chart! (www.evidencechart.com)

HSC Exam Preparation Strategy

I’ve just had a great idea for a study strategy for HSC students – well, it can be used for all types of examinations.

One of the weaknesses our students seem to have is writing under examination conditions and responding to the essay question. Far too often they rely on pre-written and memorised essays. This really isn’t in the spirit of English – and I’m sure it’s not in the spirit of most subjects.

At HSC marking last year, something we saw a great deal of was pre-written responses that students tried (and failed) to ‘fit’ with the essay question. The problem for a great number of these students was that the essay questions were quite specific – take the ‘loyalty’ aspect of the Hamlet question and the ‘one related text’ dilemma of the belonging question. It is important that students realise that examinations (especially extended response questions) are designed to test a student’s ability to ‘apply’ what they know to an unseen question. Often these questions are challenging and unexpected – this forces students to adopt a position on the question being posed and apply what they have learnt as supporting evidence.

So, what is my solution you ask yourself? Simple!

I give the student TEN practice essay questions for each module/elective.

Each set of TEN questions is printed on a specific colour paper. E.g. ‘Belonging’ is green,’Module A’ is red.

The student cuts these questions into separate cards. The cards are put into a plastic sleeve – one sleeve for each colour.

The student then sets the timer to  2 hours (length of English exam), take out ONE of each of the coloured questions (for English this is THREE separate colour cards). These are laid out in front of the student – this is their exam paper. Press ‘start’ on the timer and off they go!

There are so many possible configurations that the students should have PLENTY of sample exam papers to keep them busy.

This is a really basic idea, but one I have never heard of. I’ll let you know how the kids like it.

PS: I’m sure there’s a fantastically EASY way to make this activity web-based. Press a button and the questions are automatically generated from a selection entered by the teacher – there could even be an online timer. Could you help me out with this? I’m sure kids would like the option for tech or low-fi.